Memo Assignment

To: Professor Moody



From: Bob Forget



Date: 9/15/09



RE: Implementing feedback into my Memoir





Hello Professor,



I received a lot of positive feedback from Hilarion about my introduction to my memoir. There are a lot of different ideas that I am looking forward to using in my introduction as well as my entire memoir. A couple of these ideas include: More descriptive words, use of dialogue, and more engaging sentences for the reader of the memoir. With all of these different ideas I believe that I will be able to really transform my introduction and memoir into something I am really proud of!

The first way I will implement some of the feedback I received from Hilarion is using more descriptive adjectives to really describe my teacher as well as the classroom and the process of improv. I want to be able to have the reader feel like they are actually in the classroom with me and not just reading a paper. I will definitely be going to my thesaurus for some serious help because this is not something that is new to me. I seem to always find myself using non-exciting and normal words to describe situations and people.

The second way I will use some feedback is in the use of dialogue. I have had some very interesting conversations with my acting teacher. I am hoping that I can remember some of these so that I can use them in my memoir. I believe that they will severely increase the excitingness of my memoir and also give the reader some actual conversations for them to base the other writing on.

The third way I will use the feedback is using more engaging sentences for the reader to get caught in. I want this memoir to pop out at you and a way to do this is using very well written sentences. The one area I really want to focus this on is on the opening sentences of my paragraphs. I want these sentences to catch the reader and force them to want to read more.